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 Moku's Phail At Poetry

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PostSubject: Moku's Phail At Poetry   Moku's Phail At Poetry EmptyFri Feb 21, 2014 12:43 am

Quote :
Only when they leave your lips
Can words overturn my heart
Only when they leave your lips
Can insults cut beneath the scar
Only when they leave your lips
Does a kiss drop me falling from afar
Only when they leave your lips
Can compliments sweep me off my feet
Only when they leave your lips
Does language brighten the darkest eclipse
Only when they leave your lips
Do the words "You're amazing" mean so much

I know the context on a few lines is a bit off, and I should remain consistent with my rhyme scheme (my first ever attempt besides school assignments, so Im experimenting), but besides that, any helpful criticism would be warmly appreciated.
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PostSubject: Re: Moku's Phail At Poetry   Moku's Phail At Poetry EmptyFri Feb 21, 2014 2:36 am

Hmm...I see what you are trying to do with the use of repetition. However, have you thought of perhaps writing it in stanzas rather than as one long poem? This is purely a suggestion. I find that writing in stanzas gives one a better picture mentally in terms of what the poet is trying to convey. Perhaps try your hand at a stanza'd version of this and see how it turns out? :)
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