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Uchiha Keiji
Uchiha Keiji
Posts : 83
Ryo : 3750

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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Left_bar_bleue140/140Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty_bar_bleue  (140/140)

Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptySat Aug 20, 2011 7:04 am

Name: Kaze Shimasu (Wind Eruption)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Element: Fuuton
Type: Defensive Ninjutsu
Range: Directly in front of user
Description: Requires handseals. The user stomps on the ground, channeling and condensing a large amount of wind chakra into the earth and making it burst out of the ground in front of them not a second later. The wind takes the shape of a 5x5x1 (lxhxw) meter wall, with the capability of stopping any A-rank or weaker projectiles. This is possible due to the wind circumventing at such a rapid velocity within the wall, that it essentially dissipates any incoming ninjutsu, and sends solid weapons deflecting to anywhere but their original destination. This technique can also cancel out katon-jutsu of an equal rank, as the low-oxygen 'atmosphere' within the wall doesn't allow for continued combustion. [4 Post Cooldown]

Name: Shunshin no Jutsu (Body Flicker Technique)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: D
Element: N/A
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: Close to medium range
Description: This jutsu requires one handseal. This jutsu is a high-speed movement technique, allowing a ninja to move short to long distances at an almost untraceable speed. To an observer, it appears as if the user has teleported. It is accomplished by using chakra to temporarily vitalize the body and move at extreme speeds. The amount of chakra required depends on the overall distance and elevation between the user and the intended destination. (Once per topic)

Name: Doton: Retsudo Tenshō (Earth Release: Tearing Earth Turning Palm)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: C
Element: Earth
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 feet
Description: This technique needs handseals. This technique causes the ground surrounding the enemy to spiral inwards on itself, burying them alive or crushing them. This technique is much more damaging if used in rocky mountainous areas, or inside a cave
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Dominic
Dominic
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptySun Aug 21, 2011 7:17 pm

Body Flicker - Make sure that this one is the approved version. 2500 ryo.

Tearing Earth Turning Palm - I need more than the basic description. How fast does it spiral in on itself? What is required to break from it? Jutsu like this are a bit too much in terms for site use, due to the auto kill nature. So you'll need to really dumb it down to site specifications. How much damage can it do if it crushes the enemy without killing them? It needs a cooldown. Let's handle this one before we tackle the A rank.
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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyMon Aug 22, 2011 3:10 am

Body Flicker - It is, and I would like to buy it now.

Tearing Earth Turning Palm - I copied that technique from the Doton ninjutsu list. >_>
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyMon Aug 22, 2011 4:38 pm

Really? Well I think it needs a major overhaul then. What we finish with your edits will be the new one, bc this just doesnt tell enough..
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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 3:09 am

Name: Doton: Retsudo Tenshō (Earth Release: Tearing Earth Turning Palm)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: C
Element: Earth
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Description: This technique needs handseals. This technique causes a 10 meter x 10 meter area of the ground surrounding the enemy to spiral inwards on itself, burying them alive or crushing them. While not necessarily causing death, this jutsu does cause extreme pain and can cause suffocation if not evaded or escaped within the time allotted. This technique is much more damaging if used in rocky mountainous areas, or inside a cave. The rate at which the earth folds in upon itself depends on the user, and leaves the enemy with a set time to escape based on the user's rank:

Genin - 2 m/s, 5 seconds for enemy to evade
Chuunin - 3.5 m/s, 3 seconds for enemy to evade
Special Jounin - 5 m/s, 2 seconds for enemy to evade
Jounin - 7.5 m/s, 1.5 seconds for enemy to evade
Kage - 10 m/s, 1 second for enemy to evade

If the attack does successfully entrap the opponent, crushing force is dealt, resulting in hairline fractures upon most of the bones, which cause some hampering of movement. In order to escape from the snare of earth, the opponent must use a D-rank raiton or any other C-rank technique or higher in order to disrupt the flow of chakra through the earth.

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Let me know what you think of this, as it's more of a draft than anything else.

Also, I'd like to purchase Shunshin now.

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Dominic
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 3:28 am

Actually, you out did yourself with how well its described. I like the system per rank, in which only the speed increases and not the damage dealt, which is fine. Maybe the only thing to clarify is a cooldown, and a percentage of the hampered movements from the hair line fractures. Once that is done, bump.

Ryo deducted for Body Flicker.
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Ryo : 3750

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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 3:34 am

Name: Doton: Retsudo Tenshō (Earth Release: Tearing Earth Turning Palm)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: C
Element: Earth
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Description: This technique needs handseals. This technique causes a 10 meter x 10 meter area of the ground surrounding the enemy to spiral inwards on itself, burying them alive or crushing them. While not necessarily causing death, this jutsu does cause extreme pain and can cause suffocation if not evaded or escaped within the time allotted. This technique is much more damaging if used in rocky mountainous areas, or inside a cave. The rate at which the earth folds in upon itself depends on the user, and leaves the enemy with a set time to escape based on the user's rank:

Genin - 2 m/s, 5 seconds for enemy to evade
Chuunin - 3.5 m/s, 3 seconds for enemy to evade
Special Jounin - 5 m/s, 2 seconds for enemy to evade
Jounin - 7.5 m/s, 1.5 seconds for enemy to evade
Kage - 10 m/s, 1 second for enemy to evade

If the attack does successfully entrap the opponent, crushing force is dealt, resulting in hairline fractures upon most of the bones, which cause some the movement of the enemy to be hampered by 10%. This effect is stackable, so if the opponent is caught in the technique twice, they will have 20% movement speed deducted. In order to escape from the snare of earth, the opponent must use a D-rank raiton or any other C-rank technique or higher in order to disrupt the flow of chakra through the earth. (4 post cooldown)

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Added a cooldown and a stipulation saying that the attack can be stacked if the enemy is caught in it multiple times.
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Ryo : 3750

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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 3:46 am

Seeing as Dominic relinquished the Eight Gates spot for the tertiary-taijutsu specialist, I will be purchasing the first two gates.

Spoiler:
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Takeshi
Takeshi
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Ryo : 20350

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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 3:53 am

Genin are only able to hold a single A rank jutsu meaning you are unable to purchase the eight gates at this time.
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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 4:11 am

Can I at least claim the spot?
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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 8:05 am

Sadly no, you claim a spot by purchasing the first gate and your rank doesn't allow that. Though if you can rank up before someone else takes the spot it's yours
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Dominic
Dominic
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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 11:08 pm

Uchiha Keiji wrote:
Name: Doton: Retsudo Tenshō (Earth Release: Tearing Earth Turning Palm)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: C
Element: Earth
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Description: This technique needs handseals. This technique causes a 10 meter x 10 meter area of the ground surrounding the enemy to spiral inwards on itself, burying them alive or crushing them. While not necessarily causing death, this jutsu does cause extreme pain and can cause suffocation if not evaded or escaped within the time allotted. This technique is much more damaging if used in rocky mountainous areas, or inside a cave. The rate at which the earth folds in upon itself depends on the user, and leaves the enemy with a set time to escape based on the user's rank:

Genin - 2 m/s, 5 seconds for enemy to evade
Chuunin - 3.5 m/s, 3 seconds for enemy to evade
Special Jounin - 5 m/s, 2 seconds for enemy to evade
Jounin - 7.5 m/s, 1.5 seconds for enemy to evade
Kage - 10 m/s, 1 second for enemy to evade

If the attack does successfully entrap the opponent, crushing force is dealt, resulting in hairline fractures upon most of the bones, which cause some the movement of the enemy to be hampered by 10%. This effect is stackable, so if the opponent is caught in the technique twice, they will have 20% movement speed deducted. In order to escape from the snare of earth, the opponent must use a D-rank raiton or any other C-rank technique or higher in order to disrupt the flow of chakra through the earth. (4 post cooldown)

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Added a cooldown and a stipulation saying that the attack can be stacked if the enemy is caught in it multiple times.

Ok, this is good to go.

Price now for this is 5500 ryo. However, due to you helping make the jutsu better, Ill allow you the old price at 4000 ryo. Thanks for the help in giving it more description.
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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 11:11 pm

I would like to purchase that now. Thanks for the discount!
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Dominic
Dominic
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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 23, 2011 11:16 pm

Ryo Deducted
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Ryo : 3750

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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyWed Aug 24, 2011 1:07 am

Bumping as requested.

Name: Kaze Shimasu (Wind Eruption)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Element: Fuuton
Type: Defensive Ninjutsu
Range: Directly in front of user
Description: Requires handseals. The user stomps on the ground, channeling and condensing a large amount of wind chakra into the earth and making it burst out of the ground in front of them not a second later. The wind takes the shape of a 5x5x1 (lxhxw) meter wall, with the capability of stopping any A-rank or weaker projectiles. This is possible due to the wind circumventing at such a rapid velocity within the wall, that it essentially dissipates any incoming ninjutsu, and sends solid weapons deflecting to anywhere but their original destination. This technique can also cancel out katon-jutsu of an equal rank, as the low-oxygen 'atmosphere' within the wall doesn't allow for continued combustion. [4 Post Cooldown]
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Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] Empty
PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyFri Aug 26, 2011 3:51 pm

Name: Doton: Retsudo Tenshō (Earth Release: Tearing Earth Turning Palm)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: C
Element: Earth
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Description: This technique needs handseals. This technique causes a 10 meter x 10 meter area of the ground surrounding the enemy to spiral inwards on itself, burying them alive or crushing them. While not necessarily causing death, this jutsu does cause extreme pain and can cause suffocation if not evaded or escaped within the time allotted. This technique is much more damaging if used in rocky mountainous areas, or inside a cave. The rate at which the earth folds in upon itself depends on the user, and leaves the enemy with a set time to escape based on the user's rank:

Genin - 2 m/s, 5 seconds for enemy to evade
Chuunin - 3.5 m/s, 3 seconds for enemy to evade
Special Jounin - 5 m/s, 2 seconds for enemy to evade
Jounin - 7.5 m/s, 1.5 seconds for enemy to evade
Kage - 10 m/s, 1 second for enemy to evade

If the attack does successfully entrap the opponent, crushing force is dealt, resulting in hairline fractures upon most of the bones, which cause some the movement of the enemy to be hampered by 10%. This effect is stackable, so if the opponent is caught in the technique twice, they will have 20% movement speed deducted. In order to escape from the snare of earth, the opponent must use a D-rank raiton or any other C-rank technique or higher in order to disrupt the flow of chakra through the earth. (4 post cooldown)

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Added a cooldown and a stipulation saying that the attack can be stacked if the enemy is caught in it multiple times.

Dom, this is a C-S technique thus should be priced as a S-rank.
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyFri Aug 26, 2011 4:50 pm

None of the damage changes to the enemy. The only thing that is different ie the user's ability to manipulate the earth a bit quicker, but no damage increase. Therefore, it didn't warrant a multi rank jutsu. The previous description of this jutsu was lack luster, and he helped tighten it up. The old description spoke of depending on the skill, the user could make it faster and it was C rank by itself and was approved at 4000 ryo. This just specifies it with text and leaves no room for god mod of the tech.
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyFri Aug 26, 2011 6:15 pm

True, but the technique improves as Keiji ranks up. While the rank of the technique still stays the same the technique goes much faster.
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyFri Aug 26, 2011 7:29 pm

Then if you want it to be from C-S, then the damage factor needs to increase as well.
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyFri Aug 26, 2011 7:41 pm

Dom, no o-o

Code:
This technique causes a 10 meter x 10 meter area of the ground
surrounding the enemy to spiral inwards on itself, burying them alive or
 crushing them. While not necessarily causing death, this jutsu does
cause extreme pain and can cause suffocation if not evaded or escaped
within the time allotted. This technique is much more damaging if used
in rocky mountainous areas, or inside a cave. The rate at which the
earth folds in upon itself depends on the user, and leaves the enemy
with a set time to escape based on the user's rank:

How would you like to increase the damage? It basically pulls you down as the ground spirals inwards on yourself, either burying you alive or crushing you. He even stated that if he used it in a rock area it would cause more damage, possibly due to the fact that getting boulders on your head while you're getting pulled down is equal to getting stoned to death. So it's quite a deadly C-ranked Doton technique.

Code:
Genin - 2 m/s, 5 seconds for enemy to evade
Chuunin - 3.5 m/s, 3 seconds for enemy to evade
Special Jounin - 5 m/s, 2 seconds for enemy to evade
Jounin - 7.5 m/s, 1.5 seconds for enemy to evade
Kage - 10 m/s, 1 second for enemy to evade

Here we get the the amount of time the enemy has to evade the technique. A regular technique would have the same time of evasion regardless of the user's rank, once the technique adapts itself to the user's rank it means that it's not a single ranked technique. The thunder dragons are getting stronger in your case, here the time of evasion is getting lower.

Code:
If the attack does successfully entrap the opponent, crushing force is
dealt, resulting in hairline fractures upon most of the bones, which
cause some the movement of the enemy to be hampered by 10%. This effect
is stackable, so if the opponent is caught in the technique twice, they
will have 20% movement speed deducted. In order to escape from the snare
 of earth, the opponent must use a D-rank raiton or any other C-rank
technique or higher in order to disrupt the flow of chakra through the
earth. (4 post cooldown)

Suddenly the technique is explained as a friendly C-rank that causes hairline fractures upon most of the bones, which decreases the movement by 10%, but as explained above it isn't innocent at all, if he used it in a rocky area you're killed.

If the technique had a steady speed regardless of the rank it would priced as a C-rank, but since it increases in speed as the user gets stronger it has to be priced higher. I understand your issue of making the tech stronger if we rank it higher. But it's like if you have a D-B that makes your punch go harder as you grow in rank and I have a D that makes my punch go faster as I grow in rank.

So if a tech is rank based, it is had to priced as a rank based tech up to the level it goes.
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyFri Aug 26, 2011 8:04 pm

I understand your worry, but the first part plays no part into what the technique does. It was the old description and is just an overall summary of the technique from the Naruto Source. The actual technique itself and what it truly does is below that in the system he provided. In my opiniion, it still is only classified as C, due to the fact that it doesnt require any higher of a ninjutsu to break from it, but only with skill, does the quickness of the start occur and the hairline fractures still are the only damage that occurs.

Ill provide an example. The Water Dragon, since it was the first. The potency in which it is cast, depends on the skill of the user. However, it doesnt state that it does more damage, only the fact that how its cast varies between rank and water source. I assure you that this technique's intentions are only below the Description in which is only a summarization of the old description.

We can remove the first part of the jutsu if that is your wish to keep it C Rank. Lets not flood his Technique Topic
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyFri Aug 26, 2011 8:08 pm

The deadly part needs to go away.

Doesn't matter we can always split the topic and move our talk to the archives ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyFri Aug 26, 2011 8:10 pm

Ok, that is understandable. Keiji, remove the deadly section of the jutsu and repost it, price remaining the same overall for the Encyclopedia
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyTue Aug 30, 2011 1:50 am

I didn't state that the attack was deadly, it was like that when I copied it from the Mirage database of Doton ninjutsu. The parts you have approved are the ones that I added.

Name: Doton: Retsudo Tenshō (Earth Release: Tearing Earth Turning Palm)
Canon/Custom: Canon
Rank: C
Element: Earth
Type: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters
Description: This technique needs handseals. This technique causes a 10 meter x 10 meter area of the ground surrounding the enemy to spiral inwards on itself, burying them alive or crushing them. The rate at which the earth folds in upon itself depends on the user, and leaves the enemy with a set time to escape based on the user's rank:

Genin - 2 m/s, 5 seconds for enemy to evade
Chuunin - 3.5 m/s, 3 seconds for enemy to evade
Special Jounin - 5 m/s, 2 seconds for enemy to evade
Jounin - 7.5 m/s, 1.5 seconds for enemy to evade
Kage - 10 m/s, 1 second for enemy to evade

If the attack does successfully entrap the opponent, crushing force is dealt, resulting in hairline fractures upon most of the bones, which cause some the movement of the enemy to be hampered by 10%. This effect is stackable, so if the opponent is caught in the technique twice, they will have 20% movement speed deducted. In order to escape from the snare of earth, the opponent must use a D-rank raiton or any other C-rank technique or higher in order to disrupt the flow of chakra through the earth. (4 post cooldown)

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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration]   Uchiha Keiji [Technique Registration] EmptyWed Aug 31, 2011 2:23 am

Uchiha Keiji wrote:
Bumping as requested.

Name: Kaze Shimasu (Wind Eruption)
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Element: Fuuton
Type: Defensive Ninjutsu
Range: Directly in front of user
Description: Requires handseals. The user stomps on the ground, channeling and condensing a large amount of wind chakra into the earth and making it burst out of the ground in front of them not a second later. The wind takes the shape of a 5x5x1 (lxhxw) meter wall, with the capability of stopping any A-rank or weaker projectiles. This is possible due to the wind circumventing at such a rapid velocity within the wall, that it essentially dissipates any incoming ninjutsu, and sends solid weapons deflecting to anywhere but their original destination. This technique can also cancel out katon-jutsu of an equal rank, as the low-oxygen 'atmosphere' within the wall doesn't allow for continued combustion. [4 Post Cooldown]

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