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Kouri Ten'nou

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PostSubject: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptySun Jul 28, 2013 6:13 am

Name:  Kokoro no Kage: Mind Shadow
Canon/Custom:  Custom
Rank: C
Type: Corruption
Element: Yamiton
Range: Close
Specialty: Nintaijutsu
Duration: 4 posts
Cooldown: 4 posts
Description: This technique requires loading and for Abbadon to be active.  Once ready the abbadon palms will begin to glow purple. Upon contact with a target(s) at head level the purple chakra will phase through skin or any object that is not made of pure chakra in order to get inside of the victim and corrupt the victims mind. This technique  has two parts to it know as Choas management. At will the user can make their target very emotional or emotionless. Emotional to the point of insanity  and delusion or emotionless to the point of being less than human. This is done by the corruptive chakra linking Isais's emotions with the emotions of a victim in almost a Ying and Yang like effect. The victim becomes more corrupt and emotional due to the gauntlets power to amplify making the user insane. The user will simply transfer the amplification effect to the victim for as long as this technique is active making the victim re-experience every horror from their past or experience horrors from Isais's past as if it was their own and have these experiences amplified. The user can become near emotionless by Isais providing temporary amnesia and unwillingness to have emotional ties to past events but in turn Isais will have those painful experiences as his own  and amplifies it. This could make Isais go insane but due to the Gobi. If Isais's insanity peaks it will  Abbadon will begin to lose its hold on Isais's emotions. This technique lasts 4 posts and has a 4 post cool down .


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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyTue Jul 30, 2013 6:42 am

I approve of this
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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyTue Jul 30, 2013 6:12 pm

Name: Yamiton  Style: Minor Delusion
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: C
Type: Defensive
Element: Yamiton/ Doton
Range: Self
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration:  4posts
Cooldown: 4 posts
Description: This technique known as Minor Delusion uses the same concept of utilizing the Doton and Yamiton element to cause the body to vibrate at such a high frequency that phasing is possible. Instead of phasing the entire body, Isais has learned how to phase portions of his body causing the remainder of his body to remain solid. This technique is very flaw due to the user being capable of phasing only one part per post, at a time and the user must be state which part in their post.At the end of the post the phased body part will revert back to solid. The user can only phase his arms and shoulders, his entire torso, his entire head, or his lower section at a time using this technique. This technique also phases objects which it makes contact with, allowing the user to phase with weapons. This technique can allow the user to throw phase weapons but weapons will automatically materialize when they are at least a foot away from targets that contain their own chakra systems (that way weapons won’t just go through everything and stab you in the heart without the possibility of dodging). Phasing pretty much de-materializes the user or object, making projectiles twice as fast and the user only half their original weight.  Users can not phase through Fuuton element techniques.

Name: Eiba : Shadow Blade
Canon/Custom: custom
Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Element: Yamiton
Range: 0-8 feet
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 3 posts
Cooldown:  6 posts
Description: This technique allows the user to take basic weapons and corrupt them with the dark chakras of Abbadon to turn them black. This can happen only if the user places the weapon in the same hand as Abbadon. The evolution of the weapon will allow the user to stretch the length of the weapons blade up to eight feet in three seconds or reduce the blade back to it's normal size. This technique allows the weapon a piercing capability higher than it's original quality allowing that weapon to pierce through other weapons of the same quality or lower and withstanding blades of stronger quality. Making this corrupted blade Unbreakable for as long as Abbadon is active.  This comes at the price of losing that one weapon at the end of three posts. This weapon will break instantly if the chakra is absorbed or it makes contact with light chakra. If the chakra is absorbed the wielder or the object will experience 3 posts of insanity.


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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyTue Jul 30, 2013 10:45 pm

Yamiton Style: Minor Delusion
  • Do state that one can only phase one of those portions at any given time, so if one phases their shoulders, their shoulders would materialize upon phasing a new portion like the torso.


Eiba : Shadow Blade
  • Range: Make the max 8 feet, the size of Masamune's length
  • Duration: Make it three max
  • Cooldown: You can cut it down to three or four
  • How much higher is the blade's stronger defensive and offensive properties?
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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyTue Jul 30, 2013 11:12 pm

done
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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyTue Jul 30, 2013 11:25 pm

I will approve of these two.
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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyThu Aug 15, 2013 5:11 am

Name: Soul of Andedez
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Complimentary
Element: Yamiton
Range: Self
Specialty:Ninjutsu
Duration: 3
Cooldown: 6
Description: This technique requires abbadon to be active. The user will perform one hand seal and hold abbadon close to his face, sending chakra through his entire body.  During this time period which in total lasts 3 seconds, user will become completely black.  Afterwards the user will resume their original color, but only tanner, and dragon fly wings made of purple chakra will rise from the users back. These wings cannot be used to fly but it serves as a central source of power for the users form. These wing flap continuously at the speed of a humming birds wings and allows the user’s speed and reflexes to become one rank better. The user will also have beast like features such as wild black spikey hair, menacing eyes, and k- nine fangs at the side of their mouths.  This form also grants the user a special capability to form a dark hole upon will which would suck in and absorb anything besides people and the user’s belongings. After the absorption process is complete the user will have a black symbol appear on abbadon, and they will be capable of releasing every absorbed technique at their target in a Yamiton form.  They can only hold stored items and techniques for up to two posts and the techniques absorb can no longer cause damage to the user of this technique. If summons are absorbed they will become under the users control for as long as abbadon is active( maximum of five posts).  The black hole capability of this form can as indicated previously; absorb Jutsu(s) with a few exceptions and stipulations. This technique can absorb regular jutsu up to B rank only. A and S rank regular jutsu will phase through this black hole effect. Special jutsu, such as clan jutsu, and jutsus granted by items can be absorb by this technique up to S rank only if the target has made contact with Abbadon's Yamiton chakra before the black hole has been initiated. If no contact has been made then the black hole will be ineffective towards special jutsu of any rank. The black hole effect in incapable of working on Senjutsu based techniques. The user can only make one black hole per topic and once the technique(s) are released they will lose this form. This form causes the user to become highly aggressive and in most cases they will lose their minds, but due to the power of the Gobi, Isais has been capable of controlling it, but finds it impossible to control the aggression.


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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyThu Aug 15, 2013 5:57 am

Name: Abbadon Chakra Virus
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Parasitic
Element: Yamiton
Range: 20 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 5
Cooldown: Once per topic.
Description: Upon activating  Abbadon, the user will say “ Consume” and purple chakra particles will fill the air.  These particles are nearly invisible to those without a sharingan or any sensor doujutsu but once these particles are inhaled or makes contact with the opponent(s)’s skin they will become infected. This can affect anyone within the area and once affected it will use the same principles as the cannon chakra virus. Those infected will have chakra which will cause them to develop a fever every time they mold. This virus is simple, anyone infected is capable of surviving up to six posts with the infection, and the infection itself isn’t capable of lasting any longer than five posts. So this means in theory that this virus has no effect to someone who is wise enough not to mold chakra during that period of time. If the infected chooses to mold chakra the following will take its toll on the infected person’s health and performance in the form of a fever.  If an E rank or D rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) is used then the infected will not experience a fever. If C rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) will cause the user’s health longevity to be decreased by one post and for them to experience an uncomfortable fever. If B rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) will cause the user’s health longevity to be decreased by two post and for them to experience a burning fever which causes the victim to experience drowsiness, and a heavy headache. If A rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) will cause the user’s health longevity to be decreased by three post and for them to experience a burning fever, dizziness, nausea ,confusion, blurry vision, heavy headaches. If S rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) will cause the user’s health longevity to be decreased by four post and for them to experience a burning fever, dizziness, nausea ,confusion, blurry vision, heavy headaches, nose bleeds and possible fainting.  Ex: if an infected person uses an S rank technique then they will only have 2 posts left to live, but they can survive if they can outlast the duration of abbadon, but if they cant then they will burn out and die. So this is in essence a beat the clock technique, which forces opponents to utilize taijutsu or to conserve their chakra. Before any effect takes place there are clear indicators that one has been contaminated. There skin will become a tint of purple, increased signs of frustration, very minor hair lost and shedding.


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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyThu Aug 15, 2013 5:57 pm

Soul of Andedez: This technique and the black hole ability should be separated into two different techniques. Maybe the black hole requires you to be in this form, but the two combined is a no go, especially not just for a B-rank that already increases your speed and reflexes by a full rank.

As for the black hole, it can't absorb all techniques. There has to be a limit to what it can absorb and how much. Also, to fire techniques back that are absorbed without any real down side or cost will not be allowed. Otherwise you could absorb a S-rank technique and then fire it back for the cost of the B-rank that also increases your speed and reflexes by one full rank, which is a no go. Separate the two and perhaps just restrict the black whole to only absorbing and only jutsu at that. If it sucks in things like an actual black hole, then there is going to be a major issue right there. Things don't tend to just pop out of black holes either. So make sure when creating it that everything is well detailed and balanced, otherwise it will be denied. Once you make it, it'll be graded based and soon.

Abbadon Chakra Virus: Since we have various visual doujutsu, it can't be limited to just the Sharingan. Other doujutsu should be able to see it as well if possible, so please expand that. The range, should also be lowered to I would say 20 meters. It's a particle technique after all so that alone makes it difficult to avoid, so that big of a range seems a bit much. Also separate how long the particles last within the area outside of the initial technique itself. If the virus itself lasts for 5 posts, then the particles remaining without a host should be around for less. Also, since it is a parasitic type that infects, it should take at least 1 posts before the effects kick in, as it needs to spread through the afflicted's body. For further evaluation I'll leave further speculation to other staffers so that you get their input as well.
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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyWed Oct 09, 2013 5:05 pm

Name: Soul of Andedez
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: B
Type: Complimentary
Element: Yamiton
Range: Self
Specialty:Ninjutsu
Duration: 6
Cooldown: 6
Description:

Appearance/Ability:
This technique requires abbadon to be active. The user will perform one hand seal and hold abbadon close to his face, sending chakra through his entire body.  During this time period which in total lasts 3 seconds, user will become completely black.  Afterwards the user will resume their original color, but only tanner, and dragon fly wings made of purple chakra will rise from the users back. These wings cannot be used to fly but it serves as a central source of power for the users form. These wing flap continuously at the speed of a humming birds wings and allows the user’s speed and reflexes to become one rank better(2x current). The user will also have beast like features such as wild black spiky hair, gold menacing eyes, and k- nine fangs at the side of their mouths.  

Aftermath:
Because of the unity of the Yamiton chakra and the user, this form also grants a special capability to form a dark hole upon will which would suck in and absorb anything besides people and the user’s belongings. After the absorption process is complete the user will have a black symbol appear on abbadon. If an item is absorbed it can only be held for two posts, and returns to its original user afterwards but becomes ineffective against this user while in this form.

Exceptions/Toll:
If summons are absorbed they will become under the users control for as long as abbadon is active (maximum of five posts).  The black hole capability of this form can as indicated previously; absorb Jutsu(s) with a few exceptions and stipulations. This technique can absorb regular jutsu up to B rank only. A and S rank regular jutsu will phase through this black hole effect. Special jutsu, such as clan jutsu, and jutsus granted by items can be absorb by this technique up to S rank only if the opponent(s) had made contact with Abbadon's Yamiton chakra before the black hole has been initiated. If no contact has been made then the black hole will be ineffective towards special jutsu of any rank. The black hole effect is incapable of working on Senjutsu based techniques. The user can only make three black holes per topic and if used the max amount of time they will lose this form for two topics. This form causes the user to become highly aggressive and in most cases they will lose their minds, but due to the power of the Gobi, Isais has been capable of controlling it, but finds it impossible to control the aggression.



Name: Abbadon Chakra Virus
Canon/Custom: Custom
Rank: A
Type: Parasitic
Element: Yamiton
Range: 20 meters
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Duration: 5
Cooldown: Once per topic.
Description:

Ability:
Upon activating Abbadon, the user will say “Consume” and purple chakra particles will fill the air up to 20 meters in radius. This technique can be used in conjunction with the other techniques since it simply requires a word activation and the activation of abbadon.  These particles are nearly invisible to those without sensory doujutsu but once these particles are inhaled or make contact with the opponent(s)’s skin the target will become infected.  Another way of infection can occur is if previous skin contact has been made with the user's Yamiton chakra before, during, or after the activation of this jutsu due to this chakras corruptible nature. This can affect any opposition within the area and once affected it will use the same principles as the cannon chakra virus. Those infected will have chakra which will cause them to develop a fever every time they mold. This virus is simple, anyone infected is capable of survive with the infection with no repercussions, and the infection itself isn't capable of lasting any longer than five posts.  All who is infected will use a six point system in which will determine their chance of survival.

Damage/Signs of Effect:
So this means in theory that this virus has no effect to someone who is wise enough not to mold chakra during that period of time. If the infected chooses to mold chakra the following will take its toll on the infected person’s health and performance in the form of a fever.  If an E rank or D rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) is used then the infected will not experience a fever. If C rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) will cause the user’s health longevity to be decreased by one point and for them to experience an uncomfortable fever. If B rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) will cause the user’s health longevity to be decreased by two points and for them to experience a burning fever which causes the victim to experience drowsiness, and a heavy headache. If A rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) will cause the user’s health longevity to be decreased by three point and for them to experience a burning fever, dizziness, nausea ,confusion, blurry vision, heavy headaches. If S rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) will cause the user’s health longevity to be decreased by four point and for them to experience a burning fever, dizziness, nausea ,confusion, blurry vision, heavy headaches, nose bleeds and possible fainting.  Lingering Particles that have not found hosts will fade after three posts. After the virus has expired, all effects will wear off assuming that one has survived the infection.  

Concept:
Ex: if an infected person uses an S rank technique then they will only have 2 points left for survival, but they can survive if they can outlast the duration of abbadon, but if they can’t then they will burn out and die. So this is in essence a beat the clock technique, which forces opponents to utilize taijutsu or to conserve their chakra. Before any effect takes place there are clear indicators that one has been contaminated. Their skin will become a tint of purple, increased signs of frustration, very minor hair lost and shedding.


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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyWed Oct 09, 2013 5:17 pm

Changes for soul of andedez:

Darkness form can no longer spit out techniques.
Limitations to what it can absorb using the black hole effect
Limitations to how many times it can be used in a topic(3x)
Huge toll if black hole effect is used to its max.(unable to enter form for two topics)
Dangerous Aggression Side Effect

Changes for Chakra Virus:
Lingering Particles last 3 posts instead of 5 without host.
Range lowered to 20 meters
Indicator already added, but cant take one post to kick in because users already are granted one extra post of survival.
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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyThu Oct 10, 2013 4:04 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptyFri Oct 11, 2013 11:04 pm

Soul of Andedez:

"These wing flap continuously at the speed of a humming birds wings and allows the user’s speed and reflexes to become one rank better than a chosen target of the same rank."

I'm sorry, but this is denied. I have seen techniques made where this effect is made where the boost is decided by the opponent's rank. It would be improbable and it is just an add-on that shouldn't be there. If the target is the same rank, it would just mean one rank higher. A boost to speed through jutsu only applies to "base stats," which means the boost will not include your opponents items/jutsu that may boost their speed. Take that out and I can approve this jutsu.

Abbadon Chakra Virus:

"If S rank technique or chakra molding (such as using weapon abilities) will cause the user’s health longevity to be decreased by four post and for them to experience a burning fever, dizziness, nausea ,confusion, blurry vision, heavy headaches, nose bleeds and possible fainting."

"if an infected person uses an S rank technique then they will only have 2 posts left to live, but they can survive if they can outlast the duration of abbadon, but if they can’t then they will burn out and die. So this is in essence a beat the clock technique, which forces opponents to utilize taijutsu or to conserve their chakra."

These two things do not match in idea. In the first, you state the side effects this virus causes to your opponents, which is fine. However, in your example, you briefly state that they would die. Death-type jutsu are mostly S-ranks. I can see this being approved but first I need you to elaborate upon how the fever may incur death which in this case may only be possible if the opponent(s) is/are exposed to the virus and use a certain amount of jutsu before it could kill the target(s).

EX: If a user activated an S-rank jutsu, then how many other jutsu uses/molding of chakra would it take before they would undergo a comatose state that may bring them to death's door?

You stated the symptoms of the affected persons when they initially use that rank of jutsu, but you did not state what prolonged effects the virus has on them after multiple uses. This is a duration jutsu, so the effects need to have a "wave" for the intended length of the jutsu.

As in steps:

1) The jutsu is activated and the virus particles invade the surrounding area (need to state the distance the virus particles can travel, including the circumferential ranges as well. Ex: 20x20x20).
2) The virus infects the targets in the area (need to state how the virus gets into the bodily systems of your opponent(s) whether by smell, by seeping the microscopic holes in the skin, etc.).
3) The virus takes effect the moment chakra is molded, according to the rank of jutsu the opponent(s) is/are using.

Something like that. There should then be an "ending" to the virus' effects meaning a period of 2 or 3 posts where the virus gradually dies away.

Make these changes and we can move on from there. Thank you.
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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptySat Oct 12, 2013 4:19 pm

Soul of Andeddez:

Removed the whole matching speed thing now its just speed.

Chakra Virus:

It makes sense and the information is there.

I change posts to points, makes it easier to understand and increase chances of survival that way.

Here is a clear example of what is being explained.

Virus: 5 post duration
Person: 6 points

everything is fine even during infection . Signs of being infected is your skin turns a tint of purple. infection becomes dangerous when chakra is molded at a C rank level or higher.  Effects to the body is indicated in the jutsu but apart from the effects it lowers their survival points.

C: -1
B:-2
A:-3
S:-4

Ex:

Isais: uses virus

Virus: 5 posts

Aiden: comes in close to use fire ball jutsu of C rank calibur. Gets infected right after and skin turns a tint of purple.

Aiden: 6 points

Isais:  Dodges fireball and tells Aiden he is infected

Virus: 4 posts

Aiden: doesnt believe him , uses D rank fire ball

Aiden: 6points

Isais : laughs and tells him he is going to die then dodges the fire ball again

Virus: 3 post

Aiden: gets pissed and wants to end it all with his powerful s rank jutsu, but suddenly feels the effects of the jutsu after use of it.

Aiden : 6points -4 points = 2 points left

Isais: uses defensive S rank jutsu, laughs and tells Aiden its over.

Virus:2 posts

Aiden: this time heading the warning doesnt mold chakra any more and after two posts he noticed that the side effects that he was feeling before are starting to fade and so is the purple color. the virus has left

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Aiden; gets pissed and decides to send chakra to his B rank weapon for aid. but instead a fever has taken over him and he begins to heat up , faint, and die

Aiden: 2points - 2points = 0 points left.

Isais: Man i told you.

Virus: 1 post

Aiden had died because he spent all his survival points before the duration of the jutsu had ended.So the pain they feel only comes from when they mold chakra.
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PostSubject: Re: Abbadon Jutsu   Abbadon Jutsu EmptySat Oct 12, 2013 6:44 pm

Perfect. I like the use of the points for this jutsu. Makes it much more simple. Just make sure you keep track of those points in your posts as spoilers like with jutsu.

Both of these are approved. You can now add them to your list since they came with the gauntlet.
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